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Nick Buchheit's avatar

I love the voice and style in this. Really put me as a reader into the mind of the character even though I don’t think I want to be there. Haha

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Joseph Young's avatar

Thanks, Nick! Glad you liked. I wouldn't want to be there either! lol

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Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

That can't have been easy to write. Having characters we utterly detest, I mean. Especially when they're seedy like this guy. I've got characters like this which need to be part of the story but they are so damned discomforting to write. But it's worth it, in the end, to show what needs to be shown to the reader.

Brilliant writing this was. Great use of repetition. And leaves you with that sense of the 'not quite knowing'.

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Joseph Young's avatar

Appreciate the read and your comments, Evelyn! Very kind of you to take the time.

Fortunately, I suppose, I rarely know where a story is headed until it takes me there, or how a character might develop, so by the time I realized just how icky this person is I was almost done writing him. Maybe the ending is me playing a little joke on him, a bit of revenge.

Thanks again!

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Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Ah - yeah, the revenge bit. That’s the part that will be enjoyable to write!

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Beverly Jackson's avatar

love, love.

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Joseph Young's avatar

thanks, Bev

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